After reading nearly 400 entries, the judging panel finally came to a decision on the worthy winners for our Short Story Competition.
Children aged 5 – 11 from across Hampshire and Surrey wrote stories of 250 words based on one of the following:
• The unusual visitor
• The amazing invention
• The hole in the wall
Winners received prizes including an e-reader and signed book by Chloe Inkpen.
Winner: Madison Smyth, Alderwood Infant School
Runner Up: Matilda Coppock, South Farnborough Junior School
Winner: Lily Butler, South Farnborough Junior
Runner Up: Joseph Simmons, St Augustines Catholic School
Judges Special Commendation:
Ezekias Thapa, Talavera Junior School
Korby Youd, Alderwood Infant School
Grace Reilly, Alderwood Infant School
Winner Age 5-8, Selected by Mick & Chloe Inkpen
In Hole in the Wall, Madison has created a very strong contrast between nice and nasty feelings. Sophie is terrified at the thought of her blood test with its “pointy razor sharp needle”, so Madison
cleverly opens up a mysterious hole beside Sophie’s bed through which she can escape to enjoy all the things she like best - ice skating, eating chocolate at a “gigantic fantastic chocolate factory” and reading in “a massive library with her favourite books inside filling every shelf!”
Well done Madison - you’re our winner.
The Hole in the Wall, Madison Smyth
Once upon a time there was a cute little girl called Sophie. She was poorly so she had to go to the hospital. Sophie was with her mummy. The nurse called Emma said to Sophie’s mummy that Sophie wasn’t allowed to eat any breakfast. Sophie was so hungry, all she could think about was delicious foods, from plum rosy red apples to an enormous slice of chocolate cake. Emma also said to Sophie’s mummy that it was time for her to go down to have her blood test. This terrified the little girl because she didn’t like the look of the pointy, razor sharp needle. She wanted to run away! At that moment a mysterious hole opened up beside her bed. Sophie jumped straight off her bed into the hole.
Inside the hole there was a massive library with her favourite books inside filling every shelf. So she read some of the exciting books. When she finished reading her books she came out of the library and opposite she saw her favourite sport. IT WAS ICE SKATING! “Yippee” should Sophie. She ran across the zebra crossing. She put her skates on and had some fun on the ice. She was having so much fun that she had forgotten that she was hungry until a gigantic, fantastic chocolate factory appeared from the sky.
Inside the chocolate factory there were 20 lollipops, a bit river full of strawberry chocolate and 7 little elves. They were so happy it couldn’t help but make Sophie happy. She had the best day ever and when she went back through the mysterious hole all her worries were gone and her mummy said she was all better and could go home.
Winner Age 9-11, Selected by Mick & Chloe Inkpen
A fantastic short story written in the first person, in which the narrator discovers something amazing about herself, something which turns her world upside down and forces her to re-evaluate absolutely everything, including her low opinion of her father. Lily keeps this revelation to the very last line of the story. From very few sentences we get a clear sense of the narrator as a real person - a girl full of confidence and savvy opinions, which only serves to make the final revelation all the more shocking. It’s incredibly difficult to tell a story with such a clear sense of character AND such a satisfying ending - all in less than 200 words. Brilliant! Well done Lily. You are our winner.
L.A.Y.A (The Amazing Invention), Lily Butler
My Dad always said he made an amazing invention, personally I don’t think he has. I mean, he’s invented smaller things but nothing ‘amazing’ exactly. Sometimes he has these ‘creative moments’ but to me it’s just making a mess; those times make me wonder why Mum still puts up with him.
There are five room in our house, my bedroom, Mum and Dad’s bedroom, the living room, the dining room and Dad’s room – his creative space. On the door to his room there is a large sign which reads:
DO NOT DISTURB!
But this time I needed to disturb him.
As I walked slowly towards the door trying as hard as possible not to wake my sleeping parents next door, I considered the punishment options to come – grounding (5-10 years) and phone confiscation (it’s broken anyway) – nope, nothing I couldn’t handle. I was there now, the bright yellow sign glowed above me on the door. Sorry Mum, the truce I made at the age of 5 was about to be broken. 3 2 1 push. As I walked in, there on the opposite wall was a giant screen showing:
L.A.Y.A (Living Animated Young Adult)
My Dad’s amazing invention is… me!
Mick & Chloe Inkpen, renowned children’s authors
Angela Hicken, Literature Development Officer, Hampshire Cultural Trust
Barney Jeavons, Centre Director, West End Centre
Jennifer Upstill, Cultural Engagement Co-ordinator, West End Centre